- Dec 16, 2020
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Exactly. If the MG's are so key, there shouldn't be a massive list of SG's who have all kinds of exposition and growth. It defeats the entire function of MGs.To my mind his problem is he fleshes them out too much, which has the effect of pulling a background/filler NPC out of the background and into the foreground. Its an easy temptation to fall into, you get all these ideas in your head about them and make notes about them and then you end up with a lot of material of which 90% shouldn't ever be used because if you do, they're not in the background anymore and your story bloats and becomes unmanageable.
Short stories are the best form of experimenting on how to write. Never go into something big until you can figure it out in the smallest, most succinct way. Start with outlines, get your middle and ending, then fill in the blanks.This sort of a mental note to myself btw, maybe I'm projecting cause I tend to overdevelop characters and settings myself. Its why I absolutely cannot write a short story, everything turns into a novella cause I just can prune enough. I'm hoping to attempt my own VN, and so I pay attention to this kind of stuff as a reminder for myself of things to be careful of.
Exactly!I see Zoey as a problem because of the way she's being inserted.
Well, there was that amazing run-cycle animation at the Thanksgiving party where she has a panic attack in the woods...I'd have rather seen some scenes where Zoey is reacting to seeing the MC with their current LI, the LI reacting to Zoey, possible arguments or jealousy, etc.
And now it looks like Josy/Zoey will become a second Zoey/Josy...General rip... enough with the parade of women who can't communicate how they feel. Its become a cliche in itself.
The system is essentially broken or useless. The scene with punching Patrick being the only close one lately. Which is useless, as Maya's problem with the contract is resolved anyway in Episode 11...great choices DPC!The MC is multiple characters. In the case of BaDIK the MC is (or should be) at least three characters: A DIK, A Neutral, and A Chick.
Instead of being something like a Mass Effect Paragon/Neutral/Renegade system, it has now devolved into Neutral/Chick, as every path is now "be nice to your girl, including Sage and Quinn, even if you can't choose Chick"?
Right. The CHICK Bella and Jill seems proper. The DIK Sage and Quinn seems proper. But now it's all Neutral/Chick, and even your attitude can be permanent (which means what now?) He either changes the system up, or it's going to keep being "be nice to your GF".As I said above, as I see it, the problem is he wrote one MC rather than allowing for different versions of the MC that might emerge as the result of player choices, and that's why choices of actions/reactions are so limited. DPC seems to have only one POV of the MC and doesn't allow the MC to evolve into different versions of himself.
The Magnar reveal at the end is just silly.Now if only he was better at writing plot twists, so far in my admittedly limited experience, DPC over uses foreshadowing so much he gives everything away. Nick being blamed for everything and throwing the rest of the Frat under the bus didn't even remotely surprise me, I'd been waiting for it to happen. Even Magnar being revealed as an evil genius master mind didn't surprise me.. though I was hoping that was NOT going to be the way it turned out. I don't think that plot is going to turn out as very believable and am hoping it doesn't go Austin Powers "Dr Evil" silly.
Kurt Vonnegut is famous for saying he never uses mystery, and instead just reveals whatever the interesting idea is first, and then goes from there. Showing us Magnar is some mastermind is a waste of exposition. Oh great, another fight with the Tri-Alphas, while the audience knows more than the characters...same with the magical Bella door being unlocked. It's getting old and dragged out.
Ya know... I really should get over my hesitation and do a my own VN. The more I think about this stuff the more I'm talking myself into it.
